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10 December 2009 @ 10:18 pm
... and quacks like a meme ...  
So. I don't do memes. It's in my contract.

But ... I like to do fanfic meta, whether reading it or providing it. And thanks to sholio, I've become aware of a fanfic meta ... thing ... that's making the rounds:
Pick a paragraph (or any passage 500-1000 words) from any fanfic I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the fic, lots of awful puns, and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.

I can't promise anything quite that exciting, and I've only written four stories, but I'm willing to play. Over in sholio's journal, folk are posting snippets along with their particular reasons for selecting that passage or questions they have about it, which seems like a very useful way to spark thought processes. So if you have any such questions or interest, please feel free to pose such questions here.

I consider this journal to be my primary fiction location, but my filtered Dreamwidth account is the easiest way to see all my stories at a glance.
Current Mood: curiouscurious
michelel72: DW-Donna-Spookymichelel72 on December 13th, 2009 07:39 pm (UTC)
(Continued:) Then Donna — whose wipe back to brash obliviousness is slipping, so that not just Time Lord knowledge but her own greater humanity are seeping out, casually gives him the one thing he truly craves: recognition ... at all, really, but specifically from a beautiful woman. He's hooked; she makes him happier than he's been in a while.

And his team and Radek see that. They knew Rodney was hurting, and generally speaking they've blamed that on his breakup with Jennifer. They know that they're most of what he has for a family, other than Jeannie, and they do look out for him in their own ways. So they're cautiously optimistic about Donna. John first did his standard competition thing, automatically; I'm not sure his second-given excuse was really his first thought, but he figures it sounds good and even might be kinda true. Ronon thinks she's pretty okay, kind of fierce ... and since Rodney's interested in her, he probably won't get back together with Jennifer, which means Ronon might have a chance again with her, which is cool. Radek prefers the atmosphere in the labs when Rodney is less bitter, even though that means there's more work to go around, since Rodney isn't burying himself in work so much. Teyla likes Donna's blend of humanity and forthrightness, while thinking she's sadly misguided about the Wraith. They all think Donna's readiness to shout right back when challenged, rather than getting annoyed/offended or wilting, makes her a better fit for Rodney than Jennifer or certainly Katie. That, combined with Donna's evident readiness to up and hug someone who needs it and Rodney's patent happiness with her, make them willing to accept her, at least enough to warn her in their ways that they'll take his side and she'd better not hurt him.

As for the second quoted scene: early on in the story, Rodney was still stuck at least partly in bitter jealous mode, certain that John had once again blocked him and that she would be throwing him aside for John any moment. She plainly saw that and got a little frustrated with him. In this later scene, he's mentioned deferring to John again, only this time for perfectly legitimate reasons ... and she doesn't see that at first, thinking it's a replay of his earlier jealousy. Once he catches on, he's retroactively embarrassed about his earlier behavior in the jumper bay, and he's asking why she didn't just smack him out of his jealous tantrum back then. They're both joking a bit here — he doesn't really want her to have hit him, and she wasn't really that close to it — but she's been known to throw a slap over in DW (as have most female characters, which is a little troubling meta-wise). The point here is to show that he's grown a bit and is much more secure with her, but I don't think I really conveyed that well. I'm not entirely happy with how that part came out, to be honest; it feels clunky and underwritten.
schneefinkschneefink on December 13th, 2009 08:07 pm (UTC)
*lightbulb moment* why she didn´t slap him back then! I thought he was talking about now.

Very interesting, thanks! (Woolsey asking Sam how to manage Rodney is great, and now I want more John&Donna-interaction... ^^)

I hope you don´t mind if I friend you?
michelel72: SGA-Zelenka-Smilemichelel72 on December 13th, 2009 09:10 pm (UTC)
I've been fiddling with a possible sequel, but I can't get much of anywhere with it, sadly.

And re friending: Not at all! Friend away!